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#1 xPrOvEhItOiNaLtUmx

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 07:20 AM

tomorrow never comes... im done- thanks anyway

#2 Ronika14

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 07:24 AM

flame u?
i wont others will for sure
ur lyrics: well nice, not outstanding, but nice

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 07:27 AM

not outstanding

#4 xPrOvEhItOiNaLtUmx

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 07:28 AM

QUOTE(Ronika14 @ Jan 3 2007, 09:24 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

flame u?
i wont others will for sure
ur lyrics: well nice, not outstanding, but nice

im still working on my literature... im more of an actor, dancer, painter, Illustrator, and singer... yet i dont write my lyrics as well as i did last year when there was more emotion

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 07:36 AM

QUOTE(xPrOvEhItOiNaLtUmx @ Jan 3 2007, 05:28 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

im more of an actor, dancer, painter, Illustrator, and singer...

actor, painter, dancer illustrator singer
wtf
i am more like
author singer dancer and songwriting is what i love most....
but anyways, if u try i am sure, u'll write great lyrics

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 12:07 PM

Let me guess... you're about 15, and the "emotion" from last year was due to a guy dumping you, or your friends talking about you behind your back.
Give it up until you're a few years older and actually have some idea of what decent lyrics look like.

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 12:08 PM

spellcheck

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 12:13 PM

QUOTE(apocalyptica @ Jan 3 2007, 01:08 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

spellcheck

and a motherfucking thesaurus may help

#9 xPrOvEhItOiNaLtUmx

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 12:47 PM

QUOTE(melissah @ Jan 3 2007, 02:07 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

no ive been with my guy for 3 years... were only happy when i dont metion 30 seconds to mars lol

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 12:52 PM

QUOTE(xPrOvEhItOiNaLtUmx @ Jan 3 2007, 10:47 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

no ive been with my guy for 3 years... were only happy when i dont metion 30 seconds to mars lol

omg three years....

#11 xPrOvEhItOiNaLtUmx

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 12:53 PM

QUOTE(Ronika14 @ Jan 3 2007, 02:52 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

omg three years....

yeah (note new lyrics)

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 01:04 PM

QUOTE(xPrOvEhItOiNaLtUmx @ Jan 3 2007, 05:20 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

i dont really care if you flame me. im just looking for an honest opinion from you guys. thank you

heres another one--- see if this is better...

sitting on the sidelines
you watch me break
throwing around emotion
you love my hate
this destruction is cutting deep
inside your lies
you look in my eyes
you look in my eyes

chorus
(i scream), "break me, hate me, kill me you already burnt me, scarred me inside. dig me grave, dance upon my ashes wisper my name them leave me to die.. cause its already happened"

verse 2
im suffering
revenge drips from my teeth
its sweet bitter taste
comes back to me
i slowly
laid myself down
you look in my eyes
you look in my eyes

chorus
bridge
im losing my mind
you dont even know
im so razor sharp
so razor sharp
your running round...
your running round...
playing games
with my head

chorus(x2)

thank you for your opinion... flame me all you want

umm reminds me of a song called the kill dont know if u know it...

#13 xPrOvEhItOiNaLtUmx

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 01:11 PM

QUOTE(Ronika14 @ Jan 3 2007, 03:04 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

umm reminds me of a song called the kill dont know if u know it...

um no... OF COARSE I HAVE but sadly i didnt base it on THOSE lyrics

#14 Ronika14

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 01:16 PM

QUOTE(xPrOvEhItOiNaLtUmx @ Jan 3 2007, 11:11 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

um no... OF COARSE I HAVE but sadly i didnt base it on THOSE lyrics

i just... it's just a thought and an opinion dont get mad!

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 01:36 PM

QUOTE(xPrOvEhItOiNaLtUmx @ Jan 3 2007, 03:20 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

i dont really care if you flame me. im just looking for an honest opinion from you guys. thank you

heres another one--- see if this is better...

sitting on the sidelines
you watch me break
throwing around emotion
you love my hate
this destruction is cutting deep
inside your lies
you look in my eyes
you look in my eyes

chorus
(i scream), "break me, hate me, kill me you already burnt me, scarred me inside. dig me grave, dance upon my ashes wisper my name them leave me to die.. cause its already happened"

verse 2
im suffering
revenge drips from my teeth
its sweet bitter taste
comes back to me
i slowly
laid myself down
you look in my eyes
you look in my eyes

chorus
bridge
im losing my mind
you dont even know
im so razor sharp
so razor sharp
your running round...
your running round...
playing games
with my head

chorus(x2)

thank you for your opinion... flame me all you want

I like it... The words are good. And they make a sweet song... Congratulation!

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 01:59 PM

QUOTE(xPrOvEhItOiNaLtUmx @ Jan 3 2007, 01:47 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

were only happy when i dont metion 30 seconds to mars lol

HAhAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

Oh man...

#17 Jer

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 03:44 PM

Simply horrendous, especially if you wrote them for your boyfriend of three years.

#18 cinkitten

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 04:17 PM

Isn't the phrase "hide and seek"?

#19 xPrOvEhItOiNaLtUmx

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 04:26 PM

QUOTE(Ronika14 @ Jan 3 2007, 03:16 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

i just... it's just a thought and an opinion dont get mad!

im not... its just what i was thinking about my parents at the time... 2 more miserable years

QUOTE(cinkitten @ Jan 3 2007, 06:17 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

Isn't the phrase "hide and seek"?

yeah but when i was a small child i called it hide in seek keep in mind i cant speak any language well... ask the germans

QUOTE(Jer @ Jan 3 2007, 05:44 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

Simply horrendous, especially if you wrote them for your boyfriend of three years.

um no again parents... keep in mind im young-

QUOTE(The Vagabond @ Jan 3 2007, 03:59 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

HAhAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

Oh man...

HE HATES JARED LETO!!! and thirty seconds to mars BUT JARED LETO THE MAN WHO CREATED THE WHOLE CONCEPT!!! yet tomo is my favorite... things like this piss him off

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Posted 03 January 2007 - 04:28 PM

QUOTE(xPrOvEhItOiNaLtUmx @ Jan 3 2007, 11:47 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

no ive been with my guy for 3 years... were only happy when i dont metion 30 seconds to mars lol

So you just turned 16, right? Which means you've been with that guy since you were 13?
13 years old. That's retarded. Between the ages of 12-15, you're just starting to get to know YOURSELF, so why the hell would you have a boyfriend when you were that young?